David, I think your pitch is pretty good, and that your business idea is pretty on trend. I think that some of your facts were interesting, but that throwing in more numbers and statistics would help sell this idea the best. Also, I think that some more persuasive verbage would have gotten your points across better. Overall, good job though.
David,
ReplyDeleteI think your pitch is pretty good, and that your business idea is pretty on trend. I think that some of your facts were interesting, but that throwing in more numbers and statistics would help sell this idea the best. Also, I think that some more persuasive verbage would have gotten your points across better. Overall, good job though.