Link to Pitch: https://youtu.be/zLe5UNRKHPE
The feedback for the second pitch was pretty dry. All of the comments just spoke about how they liked that I used more facts and numbers in my second pitch than in my first. Given these comments on my last pitch, I went the same direction for this one, but added a little bit more information about the customer base that I plan on reaching.
This time around, I spoke more about the customer base I plan on targeting. I believe that speaking about how good the market is for this business is great, but it needs more of an explanation of who I plan on targeting in addition to talking up the market growth and size. Lastly, for the third time, I did in fact feel more comfortable in front of the camera, and I also did begin to memorize my pitch. Overall, I do think that it became easier every time we had to make another pitch. I believe that all of those things mentioned in the instructions were true for me and my elevator pitch.
Great job! I had the same issue as you, where I did not think I had enough constructive criticism to improve my pitch. So I also just added more information about the types of people I was targeting. Great pitch, and the more you practice the more natural it sounds like, and not feel like it has been memorized.
ReplyDeleteDavid,
ReplyDeleteI think in your pitch you could've given more statistics on the growing market for marijuana and tried to be more convincing in the way you sell yourself. I think you did touch on some good points in the pitch though and the progression of your confidence and comfortability in front of the camera is better too. Overall, good job.
Hey David,
ReplyDeleteEven though you didn't much constructive feedback on your last post, you did a great job of further refining your elevator pitch through self examination. I agree with you that you were more comfortable in front of the camera. It was easy for me to tell that you have practiced this elevator pitch and are very familiar with your pitch.